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1SectionⅦReadingforWriting——有关身心健康的比较说明文本单元的写作任务是读一篇关于健康的文章后，写一篇有关身心健康的比较说明文。Ⅰ.Pre-writing(Ⅰ)LearningtowriteafterthemodelGOINGPOSITIVEIalwayswantedtolookliketheslimgirlsonTVeventhoughIknewthatitwasimpossible.IworriedaboutmyweightandtriedeverynewdietIreadaboutonline.Itriedno-fat，low-fat，5：2，onlybananas，nobananas—Ialmostwentbananas，too.ThenIreadanarticlethatsaidinsteadofasking“AmIfat？”Ishouldbeasking“AmIfit？”Ihadnoideaalettercouldmakesuchadifference!OnceIstartedthinkingaboutfitnessratherthanweight，thingsbegantochange.Insteadofsaying“Iwanttolosethreekilos”，Iwouldsay“Iwanttoruntwokilometresineightminutes”or“Iwanttobeabletodo30push-ups”.RatherthancuttingoutthefoodsIenjoyed，Iaddedhealthyfoodstomymeals.Icouldstillhaveaburgernowandthen，butIwouldaddasaladoranapple.Finally，Istoppedcomparingmyselfwithactressesandmodelsandlookingforthingsthatwerewrongwithmyfaceorbody.Instead，ImadealistofthethingsIlikedaboutmyself.Bybeingpositiveaboutmyselfandmybody，Ibecamebothhappierandhealthier.(Ⅱ)Preparationforwriting—Wordsandphrases①healthy/fitadj.健康的②unhealthy/unfitadj.不健康的③greenfood绿色食品④healthyfood/diet健康饮食⑤unhealthyeatinghabit不健康的饮食习惯2⑥goodlivinghabits良好的生活习惯⑦overweight/fatadj.肥胖的⑧buildupone’sbody强身健体⑨enoughsleep充足的睡眠⑩takeexercise进行运动⑪loseweight减肥⑫begoodfor/dogoodto对……有益处⑬goonadiet节食⑭forma...eatinghabit养成一个……的饮食习惯⑮beingood/poorhealth身体健康/不健康⑯begood/badforone’shealth/eyes对某人的健康/视力有益/害Ⅱ.While-writing写一篇100词左右的短文，介绍你自己是如何平衡学习和休息的。内容包括：1.以前无法平衡学习和休息；2.现在已经做到二者平衡；3.你的做法。Step1Listtheoutlineofthepassage.Paragraph1：Icouldn’tbalancerestandstudybefore.Paragraph2：Howtobalancerestandstudy.Paragraph3：Icanbalancerestandstudynow.Step2Listthewords，phrasesandsentences.1.Wordsandphrases①tiredadj.劳累的②realizev.认识到；意识到③balancerestandstudy平衡休息和学习④bebusywith忙于⑤havearest休息一下⑥asaresult结果⑦fallill生病⑧allthetime一直⑨playbasketball打篮球⑩fallbehind落后32.Sentences①我经常忙于学习，因此没有时间休息。(so)Iwasoftenbusywithmystudy，soIhadnotimetohavearest.②不是整天学习，而是我开始抽时间休息。(ratherthan)Ratherthanstudyingallthetime，Ibegantosparesometimetohavearest.③我不是整天做作业，而是一天打一个小时篮球。(insteadof)Insteadofdoingmyhomeworkalltheday，Iwenttoplaybasketballforanhouraday.Step3Draftthearticlebyusingthefollowingwords.so，ratherthan，insteadof，insteadTwoyearsago，Icouldn’tbalancerestandstudy.Iwasoftenbusywithmystudy，soIhadnotimetohavearest.Asaresult，Ioftenfelttiredandstressed.AtlastIfellillandhadtostayinhospitalfor3weeks.AfterIrecoveredfromillness，Ibegantothinkaboutmyproblems.Igottorealizetheimportanceofbalancingrestandstudy.Ratherthanstudyingallthetime，Ibegantosparesometimetohavearest.Insteadofdoingmyhomeworkalltheday，Iwenttoplaybasketballforanhouraday.Finally，Igottobalancerestandstudy.Ibecamequitehealthy.Ididn’tfallbehind;instead，Istudiedbetterthanbefore.Ⅲ.Post-writing—polishingthepassageExchangeyourpassagewithyourpartner，andpayattentiontothefollowingpoints.□1.Doesthewriterexplainwhyhe/shechanged/wantedtochange?□2.Doesthewritertellhowthechangeshaveimprovedorwillimprovehis/herlife?□3.Isthetextwell-organised?□4.Doesthewriterusewordsandexpressionstoshowsimilaritiesanddifferences?□5.Arethereanygrammarorspellingerrors?□6.Doesthewriterusecorrectpunctuation?写作要点4Thepast：Iworriedaboutmyweightandtriedeverynewdiet.Thechanges：Ifocusedonfitnessratherthandietandweight.Thepresent：IbecamepositiveandIbecamebothhappierandhealthier.常用词汇like，so，too，still，similarly，similarto，thesame(...as...)，incommon(with)，both...and...，instead，than，however/but/though，differentfrom，ratherthan，insteadof，thedifferenceis...亮点表达1.Takingexerciseiscloselyrelatedtohealth.运动与健康息息相关。2.Weshouldgetintothehabitofkeepinggoodhours.我们应该养成早睡早起的习惯。3.Smokinghasagreatinfluenceonourhealth.抽烟对我们的健康有很大的影响。4.Accordingtoarecentsurvey，fourmillionpeopledieeachyearfromdiseaseslinkedtosmoking.依照最近的一项调查，每年有4000000人死于与吸烟有关的疾病。5.Unlessyoukeepabalanceddiet，youwillputonweight.除非你保持均衡的饮食，否则将会增加体重。6.Earlytobedandearlytorise，makesamanhealthy，wealthyandwise.早睡早起会使人健康、富有和聪明。57.Thewalldependsonthefoundation，andthebodydependsonexercise.墙靠基础坚，身强靠锻炼。8.Anappleadaykeepsthedoctoraway.每天一个苹果，医生远离我。(谚语)写作技巧词汇没有所谓高低级之分，只有准确不准确之别。高考的满分范文和高分作文都在使用那些大部分中国学生高中就知道的词汇。千万不要一厢情愿地把一个本来平实准确的词，换成你觉得所谓的高级词(就像说到“离开家乡到大城市发展”中的“离开”就该用“leave”，而不用貌似更高级但其实毫无准确性可言的“abandon”)。切记：最符合语境的才是最准确的，最准确的才是最给力的。